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Print at Aug 21, 2019 8:27:54 AM
|Posted by BobTheVirus at Jul 28, 2005 10:20:26 AM|
Re: [Story] The Legend of the Detestable Pollack
lol...it was nice but I didnt like the part where you said:
"there once was a crew who sailed on midnight ocean"
Instead of midnight ocean you should have said the name of the archipilago.
Not to mention the story didnt sound piratey ;) should have been more like:
Yarrr...there once be a fearsom crew who sailed the jade archipilago! pillaging everything in sight and was run by a crew of skellingtons!
lol but I give it a 9/10
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